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"Knockout!"
           
               "Eyesore."

Knocked out.

               Sore eye.
Written for #SixWordStories' Word Prompt: Eye.

Inspired by *GlynnRaynes's seven word story Six Moves to Finish: [link] .

Thank you to ~0hgravity for the valuable advice!

(Rather a group effort this one :D)
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Fluffytheartist Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this! :D Well done!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^_^
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Fluffytheartist Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe, I think I got it.

Though, if I'm reading it right, I feel like the last two lines ought to be switched.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
D'you know, I wrote it with the last two lines the other way round and then decided to switch them. You've changed my mind (again ^^"). I'll put them back as they were ^^ Thank you for the advice!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, haha. I'm glad I wasn't completely off then :)
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No, you were absolutely right. The fact that you thought they should be the other way round without me even mentioning it convinced me :D I know I can trust your artistic sensibilities ^^
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
well, awesome! :dummy:
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GlynnRaynes Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
Thanks for the feature! Glad to know that I inspired you to create a six-word-story~ ^_^ (I have to say, feels like quite the achievement :lol: ), even better that you got a word-prompt out of it. :meow:
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for inspiring me! ^^ After reading your story I had a rummage online looking at other boxing terminology but "knocked out" (and "knockout") was the only one that worked ^_^
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