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Bride/Groom

Wife/Husband

     /Widower
Written for #SixWordStories' Theme Prompt: Thankfulness.

I realise this is strictly speaking a five word story but I like to think of the absence as a "word".
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Whatisitgoingtotake Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015
Simple to understand AND beautiful. Well done
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much ^^ And thank you for the faves ^^ :icongivecupcakeplz:
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thousand-streams Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, i'm impressed. This is one stunning work.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^^ And thank you for the faves too :icongiveflowerplz:
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thousand-streams Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014
Absence as a word. I like it.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much.
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SkysongMA Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Writer
OW. But in a genius sort of way.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very proud of this one ^^
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SCFleischmann Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
That's cool.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I see we have the same initials ^^ (Though it has to be said that SCFrankles isn't my real name...)
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SCFleischmann Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
Hehe. SCFleischmann is my real name.
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zephirefaith Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Student General Artist
I have been haggling with how to condense thoughts into 6 words, and you did this with 5 words (technically).
*awed*
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^_^ I was very pleased with this one ^^ 

I hope you enjoy writing your own. Writing a good six word story can take a fair bit of effort, but it's so satisfying when you get it right :boogie:
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zephirefaith Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Yepp, I have been trying to get the ball rolling. I actually like this SixWordStory concept a lot!
Hope I can come up with some good ones too :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats on the DLD ^^

poignant piece.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^^ (For the fave too.) :huggle:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
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Fantastic!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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jswebb Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013   Writer
I have to agree with Lili and others here, absolutely. The absence of the word is where the crux of this poem's power is housed; with the word, the poem would simply be a listing without much significance; however, with the omission, we are left with a late-coming sorrow.

I'll attempt to articulate how I felt as I read this piece (and perhaps others felt as they did, too):


Bride/Groom

Wife/Husband

(Widow)/Widower...wait. Oh.
:(


There is such an unfulfillable longing that happens a split-second after the poem's close; you've dealt with time and intimacy with such delicacy here. Thank you for sharing this piece with us.

-J
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment. 

I wrote this story, knew it was pretty much perfect, then realised it was strictly speaking five words long and had to talk myself out of ruining it by trying to put another word in. Of course, there is no word that could fit in the space - the absence is the point.

I'm so pleased this story has struck a chord with so many people.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very clever, and potent. :+fav:
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^^ I was very pleased with this one - I think it works extremely well.
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word-s-myth Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Sadly true. From my experience, it's indeed (partly) because death creates a "hole" in the world—and, consequently, in the meaning of words—that being a widower is such a strange and "unbalanced" state.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not that I've ever lost a spouse (thank God), but I think that gap is always there. If a widower marries again, he doesn't once again become: wife/husband. He becomes:          /husband/wife. A new position has to be forged for the new partner; the gap isn't filled.
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word-s-myth Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm a widower and I totally agree. It's a hole that can never be mended, because everyone is unique. The problem is that, because of this gap in the background, one sees any potential partner as a potential loss, too. A double loss, actually: losing touch with the memories of the lost one and being afraid to lose the new person one day...
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The absent word, in a lot of ways, is the most powerful one here.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not to be too pretentious (^^") but I do think the word's absence gives it a powerful presence in the story. It's not simply that I've chosen to tell a story in five words rather than six - the space has an important part to play. (And thank you for the fave ^^ :heart:)
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BlueSapphire2000 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's a bit sad....But beautiful.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^^ :huggle: I was very, very pleased with this one ^^
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BlueSapphire2000 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome. Surely. :)
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fantom125 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
The Theme Prompt gives a further good contribution to this story  which I do like. Thanks!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - I'm pleased you noticed what the theme prompt is ^^ I suppose you wouldn't immediately guess that the theme of this story is "thankfulness" but once you know that, it gives the story an extra poignancy. And thank you for the fave, btw ^^
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fantom125 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Yes, exactly so!-)
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;_; The missing word makes it more powerful, so yes, I think it "counts."
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The story does feel to me like a six word story. 

I think it's like numbers: 123,406 is a six figure number, even though 0 is representing "nothing" - it's saying nothing is there. It feels as though there are six spaces available in this story, and me leaving one space empty is a positive choice. I think the reader is at that point expecting a word, and so the word being missing does, as you say, make the story more powerful. (And thank you for faving...)
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, very clever analogy. This one's nice and subtle, I really like it.
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BlakeCurran Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Student Writer
I'd like to think of the absence as a word, too. It makes it more meaningful. Beautiful, as always, though a little more sombre than your usual :P
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^^ :hug: This one did actually start off as a lighthearted celebration of a happy marriage, but I couldn't find the right words to make it work. (From a technical, rather than a poetic, point of view ^^) I really liked the idea of two words making one whole, and having them linked with a "/", and I wanted to keep that part. Then this story popped into my head. And it's far better than my original idea :D (As always, thanks for the fave... ^^)
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BlakeCurran Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Student Writer
I think you pulled it off really well, no matter how it started. I'm glad this story popped into your head, very poignant and real.
(As ever, you're very welcome :hug: )
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AquaMaroonRanger Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me of my grandfather.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm rather touched that the story has a personal meaning for you. I've experienced men in my family losing their wives as well - it always seems that it's harder for men to cope with losing a spouse. They seem more vulnerable in this situation. Bit of a generalisation I suppose ^^" Thanks for the fave, btw ^^
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