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He's close behind me. "John?"

"No."
An attempt at a ghost story.
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the fave! :D
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :D
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terence9213 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist
AWESOME CONCEPT!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks - I really like this one. Just popped into my head ^^
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terence9213 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist
You are very much welcome! I wish stuff like that just "popped into my head" more often.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, me too :D The best stuff always seems to just come out of the blue, doesn't it? ^^
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terence9213 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist
Totally! I was just jogging today, and stepped on a snail. So I tried to write a SWS about it.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Sorry - I shouldn't laugh ^^ A small tragedy in its own way ^^" Will you be submitting the finished version to #SixWordStories?

And thank you so much for all the faves! :hug:
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terence9213 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist
Yup I just joined the group! Yay!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hurrah! :D I hope you enjoy being in the group - I've found it to be a lot of fun ^^ I look forward to seeing your work! :boogie:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Student Writer
Ooh, lovely. Brilliant reveal!
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Shewroteinblue Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
O_0 WOW I LOVE IT!

Whoah, I am sorry I am like, commenting on all your writings :D
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! (I am rather pleased with this one ^^) Thank you for the fave as well. And all the commenting! I hope it didn't send you round the bend...
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Shewroteinblue Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
oh no, it didn't, whatever that means...
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, going "round the bend" means going insane ^^
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Shewroteinblue Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ohhh.
haha.
Well no worries, it was already a lost cause :D
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well, that's a weight off my mind ^^
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Shewroteinblue Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hehe :)
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MynaOphelia Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2011
whoa practically gave me chills! eerie man, well done!
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your comment! I'm really thrilled you liked it! I was so pleased with this story. It pretty much wrote itself. Wish it was like that all the time... :) Oh, thank you for faving it too!
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MynaOphelia Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011
the best stories write themselves ;) you're very welcome!
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Solarune Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011   Writer
I like this a lot; it really conveys a mood in six words, not to mention a story. Funnily, the first thing I thought of was not ghosts, but someone coming back after a long time away, someone who the narrator isn't expecting. Or is, and it's not him. The dialogue could come from either of them, which is clever.
Great piece! :)
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for your thoughtful and considered comment! It's odd you didn't think of ghosts at first... When I wrote the piece, I was thinking initially of a man breaking into a house and disturbing the owner. But this seemed too unpleasant,so I gave the story a title to suggest it was a ghost story. I hoped it still remained ambiguous, though. Might not be a supernatural being. And I'm delighted you found even more possible interpretations ^^
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Solarune Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011   Writer
You're very welcome. :D
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segura2112 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
WOW! That sums it up. Thank You
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Einstein was wrong God does play dice.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your comment! Most kind ^^ I was very pleased with this story. It just popped into my head, as all the best stuff seems to do.
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eiarain Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011
That last line really made me shiver. pure evil. :P
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for your comment! I'm glad I unnerved you... :)
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3wyl Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh... o.O

I really like the last line and how cold and abrupt it is.. quite cutting, which reflects the situation effectively enough. I like the way you've got a question beforehand to make it more... almost vulnerable, I suppose.

The phrasing is great and I like the way you've conveyed what's happening. :)
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for your thoughtful comment. Very kind ^^
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Kalyblu Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Scary how you can make me freak out in just six words.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I aim to please ^^ Thanks for the fave! And the Watch. I admire your optimism!
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Kalyblu Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm more realistic than optimistic, but hey I'm truly happy that YOU are glad.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Just wanted to say I am VERY glad you added me to your Watch. It's lovely to make a new friend. Especially one as nice as you ^^
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Kalyblu Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
*SMILES*
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